Before we do so, let’s consider the exercise from Lesson 1. I hope you have kept a copy of your effort for comparison purposes when we have another go at it at the end of the course. Try not to touch the copy till then.
For the moment, just take a look at the way I think most experienced subs would have dealt with the story in their minds as they read it for the first time.
Raw copy |
Sub’s thoughts |
|---|---|
| A popular playgroup in Larkhall has been dealt a serious cash blow by a heartless council. | Is it popular? Must find out. Larkhall. Is the place name relevant? Serious blow. Says who? Heartless. Warning bells! Who says the council is heartless? Are we running a campaign or editorial about this? |